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Preface
This is a brief post on how my story Bijou in Malhaven came to be.
About ten years ago, I was on a road trip and stopped at a little coffee shop/diner that happened to be near a college or university.
My waitress was a very cute Asian girl, who greeted me with a smile and words to the effect of “Hi, I’m Bijou, I’ll be your server today.” I don’t remember her exact words, but I remember hearing her name as “Bijou.”
She was very, very pretty, and wore a top that was like a T-shirt, but of ribbed fabric, with a deep neckline showing her cleavage. I think she had denim shorts; in my memory she certainly does, but whether that’s an accurate recollection or me just sliding into fantasy. I couldn’t swear.
She was cute, charming and a little bit flirty, all the better to secure a nice tip.
When the check arrived, it included a notation “Server: [name]”, and I saw that I’d misheard her name; it was not “Bijou”. Her actual name, on the check, was what I now recognized as being a Korean name, which was consistent with her being Asian.
In her trips to the table – to provide a menu; then to take my order; maybe once mid-meal to see if I needed anything; and then to give me the check – I couldn’t have spent more than five minutes talking with her; probably less. She told me she was a student at the local school I mentioned above, which would probably have made her nineteen or so, likely between her freshman and sophomore terms.
I paid for my lunch (bacon-lettuce-tomato sandwich, salad on the side instead of fries, with bleu cheese dressing, diet coke; no dessert), and left a generous tip as befitted her attire and demeanor, then resumed my drive. But she was a lovely young woman, and continued to occupy my thoughts for some time afterward.
I don’t know about you, but I encounter a beautiful woman like this, I always wonder: Gee, I wonder what she would look like being tortured?
I wondered about that for some time, and finally began to set down some of my imaginings. I’d never written a story before, but this one just kind of grew. I write slowly, and I didn’t finish it for more than a year after when I started it. And of course, when I considered what to use as her name, “Bijou” was the natural choice.
This is the first time I have posted it here; enjoy.
A few caveats:
First, it is long. It comprises some thirty-nine chapters (forty, counting the epilogue); and one of the chapters is in three subparts, each long enough to be a chapter in its own right. It’s more than 67,000 words, which I suppose makes it more of a novella than a short story. It’s well over a hundred single-spaced pages if one were to print it out. Bear that in mind before you decide to invest the time to read it; it’s not a short read.
Second, while I promise you there will be crucifixion, that won’t happen for some time. (
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Third, if you have read this when I posted it in the Crux Foundation, so many years ago: the text has changed a little bit, but not much. I renamed one of the characters (what kind of a stupid name was “Pelton”?); excised a passage here or there that made me cringe every time I read it; and did a tiny bit of retconning for consistency with a sequel. But really, it’s pretty much as I posted it so many years ago. If you already have a copy, you won’t find much new here.
Finally, I’d like to say, I am not David, as some early readers seem to have concluded; he is not in any way based on me, and his views are not mine. He started out as a cardboard one-dimensional character, whose only purpose was to hurt the women in the story (Bijou in particular). But as I wrote him, he started to emerge on his own, and I marveled watching how the character seemed to grow and as I discovered what sort of things made him tick. Actually, most of the male characters are pretty interestingly twisted. Although I wrote this story in a style that sounds almost admiring in tone, that’s a deliberate false note, and I hope the reader will look beyond that and think, Jesus! These guys are monsters!
I’ll post a chapter every day or two. I’m re-reading it myself, and making light edits along the way, so please be patient. I promise you will get all 67,000 words. It might just take me a while.
I know some volunteers assemble these posts into an EPUB or MOBI ebook file for a comprehensive archiving. There’s no need to do that here; I will post a full EPUB at the end, which I believe can easily be turned into a MOBI if needed; I personally stopped using MOBI several years ago.
This is a brief post on how my story Bijou in Malhaven came to be.
About ten years ago, I was on a road trip and stopped at a little coffee shop/diner that happened to be near a college or university.
My waitress was a very cute Asian girl, who greeted me with a smile and words to the effect of “Hi, I’m Bijou, I’ll be your server today.” I don’t remember her exact words, but I remember hearing her name as “Bijou.”
She was very, very pretty, and wore a top that was like a T-shirt, but of ribbed fabric, with a deep neckline showing her cleavage. I think she had denim shorts; in my memory she certainly does, but whether that’s an accurate recollection or me just sliding into fantasy. I couldn’t swear.
She was cute, charming and a little bit flirty, all the better to secure a nice tip.
When the check arrived, it included a notation “Server: [name]”, and I saw that I’d misheard her name; it was not “Bijou”. Her actual name, on the check, was what I now recognized as being a Korean name, which was consistent with her being Asian.
In her trips to the table – to provide a menu; then to take my order; maybe once mid-meal to see if I needed anything; and then to give me the check – I couldn’t have spent more than five minutes talking with her; probably less. She told me she was a student at the local school I mentioned above, which would probably have made her nineteen or so, likely between her freshman and sophomore terms.
I paid for my lunch (bacon-lettuce-tomato sandwich, salad on the side instead of fries, with bleu cheese dressing, diet coke; no dessert), and left a generous tip as befitted her attire and demeanor, then resumed my drive. But she was a lovely young woman, and continued to occupy my thoughts for some time afterward.
I don’t know about you, but I encounter a beautiful woman like this, I always wonder: Gee, I wonder what she would look like being tortured?
I wondered about that for some time, and finally began to set down some of my imaginings. I’d never written a story before, but this one just kind of grew. I write slowly, and I didn’t finish it for more than a year after when I started it. And of course, when I considered what to use as her name, “Bijou” was the natural choice.
This is the first time I have posted it here; enjoy.
A few caveats:
First, it is long. It comprises some thirty-nine chapters (forty, counting the epilogue); and one of the chapters is in three subparts, each long enough to be a chapter in its own right. It’s more than 67,000 words, which I suppose makes it more of a novella than a short story. It’s well over a hundred single-spaced pages if one were to print it out. Bear that in mind before you decide to invest the time to read it; it’s not a short read.
Second, while I promise you there will be crucifixion, that won’t happen for some time. (
the first crucifixion begins in Chapter 17, and lasts, along with a few others, almost to the end of the story. Hopefully you will find the material prior to that interesting in itself.
Third, if you have read this when I posted it in the Crux Foundation, so many years ago: the text has changed a little bit, but not much. I renamed one of the characters (what kind of a stupid name was “Pelton”?); excised a passage here or there that made me cringe every time I read it; and did a tiny bit of retconning for consistency with a sequel. But really, it’s pretty much as I posted it so many years ago. If you already have a copy, you won’t find much new here.
Finally, I’d like to say, I am not David, as some early readers seem to have concluded; he is not in any way based on me, and his views are not mine. He started out as a cardboard one-dimensional character, whose only purpose was to hurt the women in the story (Bijou in particular). But as I wrote him, he started to emerge on his own, and I marveled watching how the character seemed to grow and as I discovered what sort of things made him tick. Actually, most of the male characters are pretty interestingly twisted. Although I wrote this story in a style that sounds almost admiring in tone, that’s a deliberate false note, and I hope the reader will look beyond that and think, Jesus! These guys are monsters!
I’ll post a chapter every day or two. I’m re-reading it myself, and making light edits along the way, so please be patient. I promise you will get all 67,000 words. It might just take me a while.
I know some volunteers assemble these posts into an EPUB or MOBI ebook file for a comprehensive archiving. There’s no need to do that here; I will post a full EPUB at the end, which I believe can easily be turned into a MOBI if needed; I personally stopped using MOBI several years ago.