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You're welcome for the feedback Sir. On the subject of writing, sex which ends in a cascade of sticky, come soaked orgasms after the brutality of extreme penetration is never going to work. I always feel there's a parallel with horror when the sweet thrill is to be scared shitless by the monster the author seeded in his readers imagination. It's always an anticlimax to meet the monster itself.

Maybe it's only me but I find the horror story's wild, addictive fear is not so far removed from the kinky terror of submission. I'll admit here that I'm owned on line and to enjoy the practical sustainability of it, I must trust him not to take risks with my health or safety. But, the deal we agreed to means that if he chose to punish, humiliate or degrade me, I would be faithfully obedient. Have you any idea how precarious and vulnerable that makes me? That's the point, just the thought of how dependent I am on him sends me far deeper than any hope I'll be fucked.

In fiction of course you can go nuts. Without the impediment of reality to consider your heroine can be tortured to a hundred erotic deaths, sometimes one after another! We have a whole website here devoted to that cause. But why she would want to be is the essential difference between beautiful kinky sex and a slippery decent into porn.

I've put lots of comments like this on stories I've read on CF. I start reading impressed by a smooth, flowing writing style. I feel my pulse quicken at the peril I imagine I might face myself if I was in her place. Sometimes I want my hand between my legs as I think "Oh fuck!", imagining me as her, knowing she's going to be lashed down and helpless. Then I have to read about her "pulsating, throbbing, pounding through her, scream out loud orgasm", as if she was the actress in a million mainstream porn flicks.

Reality and credibility aren't the same thing. You can have science fiction, fabricated history, ghosts, underworlds and viciously sexy monsters but, your character's interaction with them must be real human possibilities. We all love our fantasies, as extreme as some are. Some of us find ways to bring them to life, like role playing on line or writing them on websites like this. But I think the skill in writing them, if that's what you want to do, is to maintain the fantasy's forbidden thrill. For example, tell your heroine what you think about doing to women and watch her tremble, intoxicated by a cocktail of fear and lust. Would you see "Oh fuck!" in her eyes? You would mine.

I'd be terrified from the moment you asked me out for a drink if I knew what was in your head. I can imagine you telling me where I'll sit, how I'll behave, where we'll go next. Each demand you make of me will be an opportunity for me to comply with it, each time I do so meaning "Yes Sir". Each time encouraging you to push your luck, or, if you were that confident, to make you realise I might be submissive enough.

I can imagine subsequent nights out or your insistence I visited your house, dressed as you wanted me. Would we eventually trust each other so that I fell for you? I don't mean romantically. I mean would I eventually see in you the real life embodiment of all my wicked, dark desires? Would I want to be owned by you? It's courtship, credible, kinky courtship. Then, would you like to pimp me out Sir, to make a whore of me? If I trusted you to take care of me I might want that.

I'm sorry, I'm going to have to stop writing now. I've willingly sacrificed masturbation until at least September!

Oh fuck!
September? Hmmmm, I’d like to offer an attempt to force you to break that vow. After all, denial is pointless if it is not put thoroughly to the test and you’re such an easy helpless tart it should be easy to make you climax, you cum-slut! I think a simple trip to the cafe would break you. Which ties in nicely with the theme of @Doragon ’s story which is also about breaking a slut to total submission. Yes, even for me the story has taken directions I hadn’t anticipated. Sadly, the initial strong visual image I imagined from the first paragraph still hasn’t happened! Perhaps I need to write my own doll story in order to bring that vivid image to life?

Hmmmm, I don’t usually write about female characters, or haven’t in a long time, I would probably enjoy that.

Meanwhile, @Doragon please bring on another chapter, there are fans of the story out here, salivating and awaiting the next installment!

PS @KurvyKate makes some valid points imho, overall I agree, she is an interesting analyst
 
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You're welcome for the feedback Sir.

What a wonderful reply. If you were with me in real life, I'd stroke your hair and pet you as reward.

On the subject of writing, sex which ends in a cascade of sticky, come soaked orgasms after the brutality of extreme penetration is never going to work. I always feel there's a parallel with horror when the sweet thrill is to be scared shitless by the monster the author seeded in his readers imagination. It's always an anticlimax to meet the monster itself.

I abolsutely agree. The most wonderful thing about the movie "Aliens" was the invisibility of the monster, right unto the end. In later versions the alien was much too visible to be really scary.

Maybe it's only me but I find the horror story's wild, addictive fear is not so far removed from the kinky terror of submission.

It has to do with being powerless, I think. Which in itself brings a thrill.

I'll admit here that I'm owned on line and to enjoy the practical sustainability of it, I must trust him not to take risks with my health or safety. But, the deal we agreed to means that if he chose to punish, humiliate or degrade me, I would be faithfully obedient. Have you any idea how precarious and vulnerable that makes me? That's the point, just the thought of how dependent I am on him sends me far deeper than any hope I'll be fucked.

Do you mean that it's like having a contract by which rules you are punished for transgressions or pleasures in the future? Like a trade? I know for some masochists it is like that - they are not able to feel pleasure, unless they are punished for it, preferrably in advance. In that way they can be liberated to enjoy something they otherwise can't possibly experience without tons of guilt. But being submissive isn't the same as being masochistic, I think.

In fiction of course you can go nuts. Without the impediment of reality to consider your heroine can be tortured to a hundred erotic deaths, sometimes one after another! We have a whole website here devoted to that cause. But why she would want to be is the essential difference between beautiful kinky sex and a slippery decent into porn.

I've put lots of comments like this on stories I've read on CF. I start reading impressed by a smooth, flowing writing style. I feel my pulse quicken at the peril I imagine I might face myself if I was in her place. Sometimes I want my hand between my legs as I think "Oh fuck!", imagining me as her, knowing she's going to be lashed down and helpless. Then I have to read about her "pulsating, throbbing, pounding through her, scream out loud orgasm", as if she was the actress in a million mainstream porn flicks.

Which is exactly why I do not enjoy watching porn. Or visiting prostitutes.

I enjoy watching true orgasms, believable orgasms. But pain, discomfort and fear turn me on much more.

Reality and credibility aren't the same thing. You can have science fiction, fabricated history, ghosts, underworlds and viciously sexy monsters but, your character's interaction with them must be real human possibilities. We all love our fantasies, as extreme as some are. Some of us find ways to bring them to life, like role playing on line or writing them on websites like this. But I think the skill in writing them, if that's what you want to do, is to maintain the fantasy's forbidden thrill. For example, tell your heroine what you think about doing to women and watch her tremble, intoxicated by a cocktail of fear and lust. Would you see "Oh fuck!" in her eyes? You would mine.

The anticipation of horror is sweet as honey.

I'd be terrified from the moment you asked me out for a drink if I knew what was in your head. I can imagine you telling me where I'll sit, how I'll behave, where we'll go next. Each demand you make of me will be an opportunity for me to comply with it, each time I do so meaning "Yes Sir". Each time encouraging you to push your luck, or, if you were that confident, to make you realise I might be submissive enough.

I can imagine subsequent nights out or your insistence I visited your house, dressed as you wanted me. Would we eventually trust each other so that I fell for you? I don't mean romantically. I mean would I eventually see in you the real life embodiment of all my wicked, dark desires? Would I want to be owned by you? It's courtship, credible, kinky courtship. Then, would you like to pimp me out Sir, to make a whore of me? If I trusted you to take care of me I might want that.

Thank you for sharing this. You are a gem.

I'm sorry, I'm going to have to stop writing now. I've willingly sacrificed masturbation until at least September!

Oh fuck!
Which punishment can you expect if you break the agreement? I feel very tempted to seduce you. :devil:
 
September? Hmmmm, I’d like to offer an attempt to force you to break that vow. After all, denial is pointless if it is not put thoroughly to the test and you’re such an easy helpless tart it should be easy to make you climax, you cum-slut! I think a simple trip to the cafe would break you. Which ties in nicely with the theme of @Doragon ’s story which is also about breaking a slut to total submission. Yes, even for me the story has taken directions I hadn’t anticipated.

The story developed in unexpected directions for me as well. Like the kidnapping, that was not planned but too good to drop. Though maybe I should rewrite it at some point.

Sadly, the initial strong visual image I imagined from the first paragraph still hasn’t happened! Perhaps I need to write my own doll story in order to bring that vivid image to life?

I am very curious what that would be. I myself started this story with one single image in mind. Everything in this story is aiming towards that image. Though at the moment I am not sure how to get there. Maybe that's why I have a little bit of a writer's block with this one.

Hmmmm, I don’t usually write about female characters, or haven’t in a long time, I would probably enjoy that.

I look forward to it.

Meanwhile, @Doragon please bring on another chapter, there are fans of the story out here, salivating and awaiting the next installment!

Thank you, I'll do my best.

PS @KurvyKate makes some valid points imho, overall I agree, she is an interesting analyst
Thank you both for the input and feedback. I am learning a lot here. :)
 
What a wonderful reply. If you were with me in real life, I'd stroke your hair and pet you as reward.



I abolsutely agree. The most wonderful thing about the movie "Aliens" was the invisibility of the monster, right unto the end. In later versions the alien was much too visible to be really scary.



It has to do with being powerless, I think. Which in itself brings a thrill.



Do you mean that it's like having a contract by which rules you are punished for transgressions or pleasures in the future? Like a trade? I know for some masochists it is like that - they are not able to feel pleasure, unless they are punished for it, preferrably in advance. In that way they can be liberated to enjoy something they otherwise can't possibly experience without tons of guilt. But being submissive isn't the same as being masochistic, I think.



Which is exactly why I do not enjoy watching porn. Or visiting prostitutes.

I enjoy watching true orgasms, believable orgasms. But pain, discomfort and fear turn me on much more.



The anticipation of horror is sweet as honey.



Thank you for sharing this. You are a gem.


Which punishment can you expect if you break the agreement? I feel very tempted to seduce you. :devil:
He doesn't want to punish me. I don't want to be punished. The agony in disgrace is guilt and remorse. I've only fucked up a few times for this man and he told me I'd "broken the magic". That stung me worse than any whip.

However, yes there are severe punishments available to him which I fear, which I know I'll deserve if I offend again. I'm off line for a couple of weeks now. With luck I'll remember to come back here and tell you more.

I love it that you're tempted to try to seduce me. No chance!
 
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September? Hmmmm, I’d like to offer an attempt to force you to break that vow. After all, denial is pointless if it is not put thoroughly to the test and you’re such an easy helpless tart it should be easy to make you climax, you cum-slut! I think a simple trip to the cafe would break you. Which ties in nicely with the theme of @Doragon ’s story which is also about breaking a slut to total submission. Yes, even for me the story has taken directions I hadn’t anticipated. Sadly, the initial strong visual image I imagined from the first paragraph still hasn’t happened! Perhaps I need to write my own doll story in order to bring that vivid image to life?

Hmmmm, I don’t usually write about female characters, or haven’t in a long time, I would probably enjoy that.

Meanwhile, @Doragon please bring on another chapter, there are fans of the story out here, salivating and awaiting the next installment!

PS @KurvyKate makes some valid points imho, overall I agree, she is an interesting analyst
Hola puta taparrabos,
Oh yes please, call me a helpless tart, curse me with "cum-slut". I'm going to come back and explore this thread later. I'm off line now for a couple of weeks. I can't reply to the message you sent me on Discord yet. I need permission to do that. I'll get it I'm sure. I'm controlled and monitored because writing and enjoying dirty messages is a part of my sex life, which I have offered to him to entirely. I love what's happened to me. I'll tell you all about it when I can.
 
He doesn't want to punish me. I don't want to be punished. The agony in disgrace is guilt and remorse. I've only fucked up a few times for this man and he told me I'd "broken the magic". That stung me worse than any whip.

Guilt and remorse are terribly powerful. I've been searching to overcome those all my life. I'd love to talk more about that with you some day.

However, yes there are severe punishments available to him which I fear, which I know I'll deserve if I offend again. I'm off line for a couple of weeks now. With luck I'll remember to come back here and tell you more.

Please do and good luck offline.

I love it that you're tempted to try to seduce me. No chance!

It's enough for me that you secretly desire it. ;)
 
Guilt and remorse are terribly powerful. I've been searching to overcome those all my life. I'd love to talk more about that with you some day.



Please do and good luck offline.



It's enough for me that you secretly desire it. ;)
Yes I secretly desire it. I joined a group on Fetlife called Degrade and Humiliate me, or something like it. I posted a request for degradation on that and read the replies astonished and enthralled, not just by the cascade of simple abuse I attracted but by the sinister sincerity of the real erotic evil I'd be subjected to if I was at liberty to suffer it. Oh how wicked these monsters are, oh god what temptation I would endure! I met subs who fell prey to them too.

Yes Sir, we'll talk guilt and remorse. I'm off line again for another week.
 
Chapter 43: Deep throat

I don’t know why I went along with this. She had been abducted and raped the previous day and I had expected her to be severely traumatized. It wasn’t normal that she came on to me that morning and I suspected the drugs were still influencing her. Yet at the same time I could see something had changed with her, something had been awoken inside of her. Wasn’t this better than sending her to some counsellor to be in therapy for years to come to help her repress the sexual urges she had now discovered? I wanted to see her free and independent. She needed to embrace her perversions. And possibly she could then remain working for BDC?

Was I only trying to justify the fact that had a raging boner from being around the girl and seeing her naked? I really wanted to fuck her and why would I need to justify that? Especially when she herself was clearly lusting for me. But no, the thing that aroused me most was her corruption. She was becoming a true slut.

“Are you a sadist?” she suddenly asked while I helped her position herself on the bed with her head hanging over the side. She still tried to understand me, probably because she was looking for answers about herself.

“I don’t see myself as a sadist,” I replied, “Though I do experience joy when I abuse a girl’s body. It’s not so much the pain I enjoy, but the dominating aspect.” And in my mind I added ‘and corrupt her’. I put my hand on her right breast and squeezed to get a good hold of her flesh. Then I pulled at her breast and adjusted her body slightly.

“That hurts,” she said.

“It makes me feel in control of your body,” I replied. “And I can see you love it as well.”

“You could have pulled on my arm instead?” she tried.

“Not nearly as much fun,” I replied and tugged at her other breast to pull her straight. “When I fuck you, your body is mine to do with as I please,” I continued explaining. “And I enjoy humiliating and embarrassing you even more than hurting you.”

She looked up at me with a blushing face and I noticed a twinkle in her eyes.

“I enjoy not being in control,” she confessed. “I discovered that I get aroused when I am forced to do or endure things I could not even imagine before.”

“Good,” I said and I slapped her right breast with my flat hand, causing her to groan. “You are a slut. You love it when I abuse you. I will not only rape your mouth, I will rape your throat as well. Now open up wide.” I slapped her face with my wet and erect penis, drawing slimy trails around her mouth. She opened wide and I held my cock right in front of that open cavity.

“Use your teeth to let me know if you need air,” I added, “since there’s no way you can use a safe word. Just don’t bite me too hard.” I loved the feeling of teeth against the skin of my cock. It was such a nice contrast with the warm wetness of the rest of her mouth.

She nodded in reply and then closed her eyes, holding her mouth wide open. I waited at the open gate and looked down on her naked body.

“Did they rape you in that bar?” I asked. She didn’t speak but held her mouth open and waiting while she shook her hand to indicate they had not.

“I noticed they made you perform with objects,” I added and she confirmed this by wiggling her finger.

“My guess is that they ignored your breasts and mouth, right?” And again she wiggled her finger. I placed both my hands on her breasts and squeezed. Then I slowly pushed my cock into her mouth. I passed her ivory guards and met with her warm wet tongue. As I slipped past and went deeper, I met with the swollen soft tissue in the back of her mouth. Then I felt her close her lips around my shaft and press her tongue against me, enveloping me in warmth and wetness. It felt amazing.

I let go of her breasts and took her head in my hands to reposition her, aligning her neck with my cock.

“Use your fingers to masturbate yourself,” I said. “I won’t wait until you come so you’ll have to organize your own orgasm.” I watched how she spread her legs and quickly used her hands and fingers to stimulate her slit and how she began to flick her clitoris. She moaned and squirmed, clearly feeling her arousal spiking quickly. I pressed my hips forward and felt my penis pressing into the tightness of her throat. The girl gagged and arched her back but didn’t move to stop me. I pressed on and felt the crown of my cock invade the tightness of her gullet. It was so warm and tight, I almost came. But I resisted and held it in, concentrating instead on moving my entire cock into her mouth and throat, reaching as deep as I could. I watched her neck expanding and noticed a blush spreading all the way over her chest. The veins in her neck expanded as well as she began to choke.

“Pick up my pace to breath,” I ordered her and I pulled back out of her throat, waited a fraction of a second and then pushed back in. I repeated the movement a number of times until I noticed she was breathing in sync with my motions. And when I sped up a little, she followed with her breathing, her chest rising and falling in unison with my thrusts. Faster I still went, pushing my cock in and out of her tight throat, fucking her like it was her pussy. She squirmed more, coughed sometimes and kept arching her back while she tried to cope with my throat rape. She also shuddered in lust as her fingers worked her slit at the same time.

For awhile I fucked her throat at full force, enjoying the sensation of my cock going in and out of her tight gullet at full stabbing speed. But then I felt my balls tightening and as I pushed fully in, I erupted, sending my semen straight down her throat. The girl spasmed and convulsed and suddenly she too erupted in a massive orgasm while stroking her clit and slit fast with her full hand.

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I smiled with satisfaction as her corruption seemed to be complete.

Later we lied on the bed, naked and satisfied.

“Do you care for me?” she asked softly. Her bonding hormones were undoubtedly activated by so much orgasmic lust. Usually I counteracted that by being extra cruel or by simply dismiss the girl. I felt no need to bond, it was just sex. But this time I too felt different. This girl was special. And with a smile I stroked the hair from her face and kissed her. There was no need for words.


(End of Part 2 – the rest will follow later)


@Doragon

I MISS THIS STORY
pls help us
 
What do you use as a cooler solution? Also, hello from Brazil. :p
Brazil is likely a lot hotter than where I live in Europe. But for me and my computer it gets too warm during the summer lately. I should get a better cooling fan for my computer to match the heavier graphics card I have, but all in good time. For now I am waiting for the rain to come.
 
Brazil is likely a lot hotter than where I live in Europe. But for me and my computer it gets too warm during the summer lately. I should get a better cooling fan for my computer to match the heavier graphics card I have, but all in good time. For now I am waiting for the rain to come.
Chill out. You do great story telling and artwork. Move on when it feels right. Greetings from the hot spot of the USA.
 
Thinking of all the great porn that's pouring out these days-should we call it a Pornado!


haaa haaaa

you are a great artist and novels writer

but i might disagree here

porn was and always will be garbage
sorry

its bad acting
bad drama
fakes
editing and manipulation of scenes
no emotions
no expressions
no feelings

its very cringe and highly boring
 
haaa haaaa

you are a great artist and novels writer

but i might disagree here

porn was and always will be garbage
sorry

its bad acting
bad drama
fakes
editing and manipulation of scenes
no emotions
no expressions
no feelings

its very cringe and highly boring
Can't disagree. But I was referencing the sheer volume. That includes good artwork and stories. The internet and in fact even mainstream media is drenched with it. References to it, styles from it and "stars" from it are commonly seen. I remember far enough back when mentioning pornography in mainstream media wasn't done.
 
sooooo @Doragon you know what we would like !!!!!!!!
I understand and I apologize. Though it got cooler, I didn't resume writing and illustrating, lacking all inspiration. I also fell ill and after a couple of weeks of recovery, I still do not feel any stimulus to be unfriendly to women in fantasy. I am not sure when (or if) I will return to that. I also wonder if this story should be continued. I'll let you know.
 
I understand and I apologize. Though it got cooler, I didn't resume writing and illustrating, lacking all inspiration. I also fell ill and after a couple of weeks of recovery, I still do not feel any stimulus to be unfriendly to women in fantasy. I am not sure when (or if) I will return to that. I also wonder if this story should be continued. I'll let you know.
No need to apologise!

You once asked me the image I first imagined from the title?

I imagined a finished product standing tall in a shiny black rubber hobble dress, with 8” high heels, the dress down to the ankles, skin tight, covering her front, a zipper “pocket” to access her pussy, two holes exposing her breasts, otherwise right to her neck, clasped by a collar. The back is entirely bare in an oval shape with the dress meeting above her bum and sheer to the ankles but with an oval gap exposing her buttocks. Ankles and wrists chained with tight cuffs, connected in the middle to a long chain which threads through her restraints at her knees, waist, wrist, elbows, titchain (tits are clamped), and collar. Her face is covered with a black mask, a rebreather clipped to her earring.

She has an oval serving tray from which she must serve her Superiors drinks. It is pleasurable observing her struggle to move, tray balanced in her tightly restricted hands, as she hobbles along to the bar. We encourage her by rattan cane to her buttocks, bullwhip to the back, and a signal whip for her tits…

For fun we constrict the airflow through her rebreather mask while electrotorturing her tits and clit. Or make her stand with a vibrator plugged into her pussy with heavy breath control…

This was the product I was waiting to see, nay more than that, I wanted to be transformed into such a product!
 
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