thecuriousone
Tribune
A long story, but seriously worth reading every word of it.
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Bijou in Malhaven
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fauxface
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Epilogue
David sat alone in his living room, quietly sipping at the glass of scotch. The sun was nearly down outside, and he was in near darkness now. Somehow, getting up to turn on a light had not seemed important.It had only been a few hours, and he already found himself missing Bijou. James had called him earlier and told him of a new girl, a twenty-something model he’d picked up on his most recent travels in Japan. He’d told David that Ruriko would make him forget all about Bijou.
David had to smile at that. Typical James. He could be a bit simplistic at times. This Ruriko girl was Japanese, Bijou was Korean-American; both Asian, so, hey, same thing, right? He thought of when he was a little boy, and his parents had gotten him a new puppy after his dog Boomer had died. As if one could replace the other.
James didn’t realize: it wasn’t Bijou’s appearance – at least it wasn’t only that. It was how the girl had sparkled, had sparked, that had captured David so. But James’s heart was in the right place, David realized; he was just trying to help his friend.
He and James worked completely differently. David kidnapped his girls, who awakened in Malhaven to find out immediately their predicament. James, on the other hand, always a smooth talker, preferred tricking them into coming with him. He’d lured Ruriko with some barely plausible tale of a modeling opportunity. The girl had been here a week and still didn’t know the score. She thought she was meeting important agents and producers, men who would advance her career. James had chuckled as he related to David how excited the new girl was to be here. A bundle of energy, constantly flashing a non-stop contagiously radiant smile. The girl had no fucking clue.
David had thanked him, but begged off. He wasn’t in the mood for a new woman right now. And no one could make him forget Bijou. No one. David was not sure of much, but he was certain of one thing: he would not forget Bijou; not for a very long time.
His glass was empty, and David had just risen to pour himself another, when there was a knock on the door. James. Damn it, he really did not feel like company tonight. He went to the door and grudgingly opened it.
It was James, of course, accompanied by a stunningly pretty Asian girl with a full-on smile. Of course. That would be Ruriko.
“Hello, David,” James greeted him loudly. “I know it’s been a long day for you, but I promised Ruriko I’d bring her over to meet you.” James had told the girl that David was a producer of some sort. “I’ve got something to take care of, so I’ll just leave the two of you alone for a while, okay?” And he was gone before David could protest.
Resignedly, David invited the girl in. He gestured with the glass in his hand. “Would you like a drink?” he asked.
The woman flashed her incredible smile at him, and David found himself smiling a little bit, too, despite the hollow ache inside him. “Yes, please,” she said. “Do you have any wine?” Her English was tinged with the tiniest accent. It was disengagingly charming. And James was right, he realized; the girl was incredibly beautiful. They went into the kitchen in search of a chilled chenin blanc and corkscrew.
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Hours later, Ruriko was in his basement, her wrists chained above her, desperately begging David for mercy.
She was no longer smiling.
And David had completely forgotten Bijou.
fauxface
Executioner
I have the bad habit of starting stories when I'm enthused about some woman or other, or some idea; but then as time goes on, I lose my interest in completing them as something or someone else attracts my fancy. I just counted and I have some 39 stories in one state or another. About ten of those are no more than a few paragraphs of the general idea; but most are two to five fully fleshed out chapters then, alas, abandoned.
A few that are pretty well along, that I'm toying with finishing and posting:
Jaycee in Malhaven
This is a direct sequel to Bijou in Malhaven, and features David and a new girl, Jaycee. It's essentially complete, but the ending needs significant rewrite before I could post it. Amazingly, it's even longer than Bijou, which may tax some readers' attentions. Bijou is about 68,000 words; Jaycee is, in its current not-quite-finished form, about 99,000 words! It probably qualifies as a novel. It was inspired by what was a throwaway reference in Bijou: "It is the judgment of the council of Malhaven that you be stripped, scourged and crucified, your limbs nailed to a cross of wood, there to remain until your death." Who is this "council", anyway? So I decided to explore that a little in Jaycee.
Like Bijou, poor Jaycee goes through a lot of stuff before she is crucified; unlike Bijou, Jaycee is the only female character in her story. There's not a whole lot of plot in this one; what plot there is is really there to support the torture scenes. This is probably the last story I will ever write with David. If I ever do a third (and I must admit I have an idea of how a third story would go), I will kill him off in it -- and I will enjoy doing it. I really don't like that guy.
Darya Chastised
This is another Malhaven story, but much shorter: only four chapters and an epilogue, about 8,000 words total. It explores a group of Malhaven members whose role is to punish girls when the master to whom they have been assigned wishes to delegate that task. The good news is that it is fully complete; the bad news is that it barely features crucifixion at all: the only crucifixion is in the rather short epilogue, and it is described only fleetingly. Because of the almost-no-crucifixion, it might not fit the rules for posting here.
Jiali and Daniela
Another Malhaven story, this one featuring a mother-daughter pair tortured and crucified. The last couple chapters exist only as a series of paragraphs of notes to myself describing what I still need to fully flesh out and write. I'm embarrassed to say, this one is so brutal it makes me wince when I read it; it's far worse than Bijou or Jaycee. It's shorter than Bijou (at least so far), only 24,000 words. But then, I still have one chapter to finish, and one to write completely; it could still grow.
Slaves' End
This is a non-Malhaven story, written in a badly-researched Rome setting, where a slaveowner and his family is murdered, and so the entire household of slaves is crucified. It's about 80% done.
I write mostly for myself, and I get pleasure from reading even the incomplete ones from time to time. The problem is, I write really slowly, I'm afraid, and set things aside for months at a time. But if any of these particularly interest you, let me know, I can be motivated to finish them up.
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thecuriousone
Tribune
When you have time and are in the mood, pick one story and try to complete it.
I understand the problem with finishing stories, that's why I like to keep my stories short.
I understand the problem with finishing stories, that's why I like to keep my stories short.
Wow that was amazing in so many levels. I hate David, but I’d love to be Bijou and live under his wrath…
Such a tragic and compelling story for someone like me. I suppose it’s even rarer for somebody to read this identifying with the victim, but that’s precisely how I enjoy such stories. So thank you
Your torture scenes were brutal and horrific, pushing my buttons every time, especially Bijou’s whipping, scourging and 4 day crucifixion. Mmmm, and Tracy’s branding torture.
I’ll find my way to Malhaven one day, and offer myself to the grim Masters of their domain… only 7 years of torture? I only wish it could be longer…
Such a tragic and compelling story for someone like me. I suppose it’s even rarer for somebody to read this identifying with the victim, but that’s precisely how I enjoy such stories. So thank you
Your torture scenes were brutal and horrific, pushing my buttons every time, especially Bijou’s whipping, scourging and 4 day crucifixion. Mmmm, and Tracy’s branding torture.
I’ll find my way to Malhaven one day, and offer myself to the grim Masters of their domain… only 7 years of torture? I only wish it could be longer…
If it’s complete then please publish here!
We don’t have any rules about including crucifixion (very few of my much shorter stories include any) and we have an entire BDSM section for anything Sadomasochistic that isn’t crux related!
So please do publish!
fauxface
Executioner
I'll have another look at it and see if it's the right time to publish.
Darya was the third Malhaven story I wrote, after Bijou and Jaycee; and I know it depends on the context from those stories. I don't recall if just having Bijou out first is enough, or whether it really depends on Jaycee, too.
Another more personal aspect is that the main subject of Bijou was an Asian woman. In contrast, the subject in Jaycee is an American blonde girl, more like Piper in the Bijou story, quite different from the Korean Bijou, and I like that diversity.
But the main subject of Darya is what is likely a half-Asian woman. I hate to put out Bijou and Darya back-to-back, and to look like my stories are Asian-fetish stories. Although I certainly appreciate Asian beauty (hey, I married an Asian beauty), I hate to give the impression of a single-track writer. This probably bugs me well out of proportion to reality, but there it is.
I argue you’re overthinking this. Any suspicion would dissolve with the third story. And I don’t see anything wrong with such a fetish anyway
fauxface
Executioner
Yep, that sounds like me!
