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I just finished reading the last chapter and…wow. Wow, wow, wow. This was such an incredible story. For such a simple storyline, it had an impressive quality of plot, crescendo, climaxes, and satisfaction.
Thank you so much!!! I'm truly happy that you like it! And thank you for the extensive reply!
I can’t say I picked up on every reference but I may identify more of them when I re-read it. Your characters had excellent complexity and depth.
I'll wait a little and collect them - if I can find them all.
I gave these two characters quite some thought, but they kept evolving throughout the writing process.
The penultimate chapter was packed with intensity and the buildup toward and moment of Mark’s realization was one I deeply related to.

I’d call this work a masterpiece or even a manifesto. It’s beautiful.
Yeah, Chapter 11 was intense for me too on many levels. I won't deny that there's a lot of me (or a younger version of me) in Mark, along with some autobiographical elements. I could call it a manifesto, as it was somewhat therapeutic for me to spell out on a keyboard what was forced out from Mark.
There are a few questions left unanswered but not in an unsatisfying way. I think there’s room for a sequel, certainly. Well done!
I love open endings, and I definitely plan to continue it. I am toying with some ideas at the moment, but I already have a intro in my mind for Part 2, so that's something. Thank you again for the review.
 
Greetings, dear readers!

As promised, here's a peek behind the curtain at the cultural references sprinkled throughout our my tale. Think you caught them all? Let's see if I can't surprise you.

"Blue as ice and... desire" - This gem from Blondie's "Maria" caught my eye ages ago. An intriguing juxtaposition, isn't it? Desire is usually red-hot, not ice-blue. But for our snow leopard-eyed Lia, it's fitting on multiple levels.

"For long is the way and hard, that out of Hell leads up to light." - Ah, Milton's "Paradise Lost". I'd love to claim I plucked this from my extensive reading of 17th-century epic poetry, but honesty compels me to admit: it's from "Se7en". Which, by the way, is a must-watch if you haven't already.

Speaking of "Se7en" John Doe's line "Nothing wrong with a man taking pleasure in his work" is a masterclass in character depth. It's the moment you realize you're not dealing with a garden-variety psychopath, but someone far more... complex.

"Suffer well" - A happy accident, this one. It started as a World of Warcraft callback (hello, fellow gamers!) but a quick Google led me to Depeche Mode's lyrics. Sometimes, the pop culture gods smile upon us writers. For those unfamiliar with WoW, "Suffer well" is a catchphrase often used by Death Knights, a class of undead warriors. The phrase encapsulates their tragic existence - forced to endure unlife and inflict suffering, yet finding purpose in their pain. It's a sentiment that resonated deeply with the themes of our story, don't you think?

"Iny weeny teeny weeny, shriveled little short dick man, don't want don't want don't want" - I'll be honest, I despise this tune. But thanks to "Billions" (a treasure trove of references) it found its way into our story. The things we do for art, right?

"Eeny, meeny, miny, moe" - Zed's rhyme from "Pulp Fiction" was an obvious choice for Lia. That scene in the pawn shop basement? Pure tension. I couldn't resist borrowing a bit of that energy.

"I am altering the deal. Pray I don't alter it any further." - Darth Vader, guyz. Because sometimes, you just need to channel your inner Sith Lord. I've always dreamed of being in a position of power where I could use this phrase. As a diehard Star Wars fan (just don't get me started on the sequels) this was a must-include. The Empire's aesthetics, their sense of order, and yes, their capacity for cruelty, have always fascinated me. Vader's character arc - from fallen hero to tyrant to redeemed father - is a masterclass in complex characterization. His ability to project power through mere words, as in this quote, is something I've always admired and sought to emulate in my writing.

"Never been kissed" - Sure, the movie hasn't aged well, but for us late bloomers, it struck a chord. And hey, good things come to those who wait, right?

Finally, "I am so happy to have finally met you, Mark" - This one's a bit of a mind-bender. I just typed it out, sounding good enough in that scene. But it looked familiar somehow, gnawing at my psyche like a mindworm. Then it clicked. There's a scene in the series Firefly where a main character is tortured, and the torturer quotes from a mad poet called Shan Yu: "Live with a man 40 years. Share his house, his meals. Speak on every subject. Then tie him up, and hold him over the volcano's edge. And on that day, you will finally meet the man." While I'm not sure Shan Yu was right, it fits our story really well, don't you think?

And there you have it - a tour through the pop culture landscape of this stoy. Did I miss any? Let me know if you think so.
 
Oh, and one more thing:

I can't wrap up this tour of influences above without mentioning the foundation of it all - Kirsten Smart. For me, she's the alpha and omega of the genre. Her works were my main motivation and continue to be a wellspring of inspiration. The way she weaves intricate narratives of power, pain, and transformation is unparalleled. Her characters' journeys, filled with intense physical and psychological experiences, have deeply influenced my approach to storytelling. If you haven't read her works, you absolutely should. They've shaped not just my writing, but my understanding of the complex dynamics at play in these kinds of stories. Kirsten's influence is woven throughout my story, a constant reminder of the heights this genre can reach in the hands of a master.
 
Oh, and one more thing:

I can't wrap up this tour of influences aobve without mentioning the foundation of it all - Kirsten Smart. For me, she's the alpha and omega of the genre. Her works were my main motivation and continue to be a wellspring of inspiration. The way she weaves intricate narratives of power, pain, and transformation is unparalleled. Her characters' journeys, filled with intense physical and psychological experiences, have deeply influenced my approach to storytelling. If you haven't read her works, you absolutely should. They've shaped not just my writing, but my understanding of the complex dynamics at play in these kinds of stories. Kirsten's influence is woven throughout my story, a constant reminder of the heights this genre can reach in the hands of a master.
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The stage is set for a sequel.One filled with sex and lovemaking. An unexpected ending for me to be sure and I feel unfulfilled as I expected the Lia and Mark would fall in love and consumate it with a very arousing sex scene. I was preparing myself for a very satisfying orgasm as I read this in bed last night only to read that Mark put on his trousers! Thank you for such an entertaining tale which held me entranced for days. This is the best bdsm story I can ever recall reading. You brought Lia and Mark to life.
 
The stage is set for a sequel.One filled with sex and lovemaking. An unexpected ending for me to be sure and I feel unfulfilled as I expected the Lia and Mark would fall in love and consumate it with a very arousing sex scene. I was preparing myself for a very satisfying orgasm as I read this in bed last night only to read that Mark put on his trousers! Thank you for such an entertaining tale which held me entranced for days. This is the best bdsm story I can ever recall reading. You brought Lia and Mark to life.
Thank you for your thoughtful comment. I'm truly glad the story resonated with you so deeply.

The final chapter did take a lot longer to write than I expected. I had several versions competing in my head, including one where Lia and Mark have sex. But I chose a different path for a couple of reasons.

First, I wanted to leave some things unresolved, maybe setting up a future story. More importantly, though, I felt the need to inject a bit of reality into the ending. After everything Mark went through, both physically and mentally, he'd be completely drained. That's why the kiss felt right - it hinted at more, but also acknowledged the harsh reality of their situation.

You're spot on about Lia's desires. She and Mark both wanted more, but sometimes life (and occasionally, a somewhat mean writer) gets in the way.

For Mark, I saw that kiss as incredibly significant. It wasn't just a physical act, but a profound connection after everything they'd been through. Of course, you're free to interpret it differently - that's the beauty of storytelling!

I'm really happy my story kept you immersed and brought you joy. Don't worry, I'm already thinking about bits and pieces for a sequel. But like Mark's journey, I don't want to rush it. Good stories, like the complex relationship between Lia and Mark, need time to develop properly.

Thanks again for engaging so deeply with the story. Your feedback really means a lot to me.
 
I'm reading this since page 1 and so far I am LOVING it!

Kirsten Smart provides such great inspiration doesn't she? I feel the exact same way as you do about her... my absolute favorite by far!

There is so much to love here. The description of the environment, the feeling of the bitter cold... the desolation and hopelessness of the environment, the emotions of the protagonist, what led him to this situation, all of it is so fantastic! I can't wait to read more!
 
I'm reading this since page 1 and so far I am LOVING it!

Kirsten Smart provides such great inspiration doesn't she? I feel the exact same way as you do about her... my absolute favorite by far!

There is so much to love here. The description of the environment, the feeling of the bitter cold... the desolation and hopelessness of the environment, the emotions of the protagonist, what led him to this situation, all of it is so fantastic! I can't wait to read more!
Thank you so much! The first 12 chapters are all here, and I am slowly working on a sequel at the moment. Nonetheless, the story stands on its on here too. Let me know how you feel about the other chapters
 
Back to reading this after an unfortunate necessary break. What a wonderful treat! The descriptions are absolutely exquisite! Seriously, Kristen Smart would be envious of this!

Just about to start page 4, but that will have to wait a bit. I can't wait to read it, and this other story you've got!
 
Back to reading this after an unfortunate necessary break. What a wonderful treat! The descriptions are absolutely exquisite! Seriously, Kristen Smart would be envious of this!

Just about to start page 4, but that will have to wait a bit. I can't wait to read it, and this other story you've got!
Dear Anya,
I hope you feel better and will enjoy the stories :)
 
The stage is set for a sequel.One filled with sex and lovemaking. An unexpected ending for me to be sure and I feel unfulfilled as I expected the Lia and Mark would fall in love and consumate it with a very arousing sex scene. I was preparing myself for a very satisfying orgasm as I read this in bed last night only to read that Mark put on his trousers! Thank you for such an entertaining tale which held me entranced for days. This is the best bdsm story I can ever recall reading. You brought Lia and Mark to life.
Sequel is being posted, my lady. The Price She Pays - Echoes of Reckoning
 
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