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Hmmmm, I don’t usually write about female characters, or haven’t in a long time, I would probably enjoy that.
Meanwhile, @Doragon please bring on another chapter, there are fans of the story out here, salivating and awaiting the next installment!
PS @KurvyKate makes some valid points imho, overall I agree, she is an interesting analyst
September? Hmmmm, I’d like to offer an attempt to force you to break that vow. After all, denial is pointless if it is not put thoroughly to the test and you’re such an easy helpless tart it should be easy to make you climax, you cum-slut! I think a simple trip to the cafe would break you. Which ties in nicely with the theme of @Doragon ’s story which is also about breaking a slut to total submission. Yes, even for me the story has taken directions I hadn’t anticipated. Sadly, the initial strong visual image I imagined from the first paragraph still hasn’t happened! Perhaps I need to write my own doll story in order to bring that vivid image to life?You're welcome for the feedback Sir. On the subject of writing, sex which ends in a cascade of sticky, come soaked orgasms after the brutality of extreme penetration is never going to work. I always feel there's a parallel with horror when the sweet thrill is to be scared shitless by the monster the author seeded in his readers imagination. It's always an anticlimax to meet the monster itself.
Maybe it's only me but I find the horror story's wild, addictive fear is not so far removed from the kinky terror of submission. I'll admit here that I'm owned on line and to enjoy the practical sustainability of it, I must trust him not to take risks with my health or safety. But, the deal we agreed to means that if he chose to punish, humiliate or degrade me, I would be faithfully obedient. Have you any idea how precarious and vulnerable that makes me? That's the point, just the thought of how dependent I am on him sends me far deeper than any hope I'll be fucked.
In fiction of course you can go nuts. Without the impediment of reality to consider your heroine can be tortured to a hundred erotic deaths, sometimes one after another! We have a whole website here devoted to that cause. But why she would want to be is the essential difference between beautiful kinky sex and a slippery decent into porn.
I've put lots of comments like this on stories I've read on CF. I start reading impressed by a smooth, flowing writing style. I feel my pulse quicken at the peril I imagine I might face myself if I was in her place. Sometimes I want my hand between my legs as I think "Oh fuck!", imagining me as her, knowing she's going to be lashed down and helpless. Then I have to read about her "pulsating, throbbing, pounding through her, scream out loud orgasm", as if she was the actress in a million mainstream porn flicks.
Reality and credibility aren't the same thing. You can have science fiction, fabricated history, ghosts, underworlds and viciously sexy monsters but, your character's interaction with them must be real human possibilities. We all love our fantasies, as extreme as some are. Some of us find ways to bring them to life, like role playing on line or writing them on websites like this. But I think the skill in writing them, if that's what you want to do, is to maintain the fantasy's forbidden thrill. For example, tell your heroine what you think about doing to women and watch her tremble, intoxicated by a cocktail of fear and lust. Would you see "Oh fuck!" in her eyes? You would mine.
I'd be terrified from the moment you asked me out for a drink if I knew what was in your head. I can imagine you telling me where I'll sit, how I'll behave, where we'll go next. Each demand you make of me will be an opportunity for me to comply with it, each time I do so meaning "Yes Sir". Each time encouraging you to push your luck, or, if you were that confident, to make you realise I might be submissive enough.
I can imagine subsequent nights out or your insistence I visited your house, dressed as you wanted me. Would we eventually trust each other so that I fell for you? I don't mean romantically. I mean would I eventually see in you the real life embodiment of all my wicked, dark desires? Would I want to be owned by you? It's courtship, credible, kinky courtship. Then, would you like to pimp me out Sir, to make a whore of me? If I trusted you to take care of me I might want that.
I'm sorry, I'm going to have to stop writing now. I've willingly sacrificed masturbation until at least September!
Oh fuck!
Hmmmm, I don’t usually write about female characters, or haven’t in a long time, I would probably enjoy that.
Meanwhile, @Doragon please bring on another chapter, there are fans of the story out here, salivating and awaiting the next installment!
PS @KurvyKate makes some valid points imho, overall I agree, she is an interesting analyst
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